tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6374197391114578664.post198206564871620120..comments2010-02-01T19:02:42.135-05:00Comments on THE GROUP: Brando Facsimile by Kevin TaskerTHEGROUPOUhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01159911141564085209noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6374197391114578664.post-78835261078989722742010-02-01T18:54:54.796-05:002010-02-01T18:54:54.796-05:00Kevin,
I like this piece, there is nice detail an...Kevin,<br /><br />I like this piece, there is nice detail and description in "grandma's prized,/ yellow comforters". Great specific detail, metaphor, to describe the man's face. The man's apathy/old-age is well spoken. The last two paragraphs are nice, the "sallow ghost" feels weird (as a reader I feel like I'm doing too much reading into the "ghost" as metaphor, which I believe is a falsity, it's just a descriptor, right?). "Ghost" feels too common I guess. In the first paragraph, "triumph over gravity" feels familiar. Overall, I think this is a solid poem.<br /><br />SethTHEGROUPOUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01159911141564085209noreply@blogger.com